WHAT'S GONNA HAPPEN TO HER KIDS?
This is the BEST piece of writing I've ever read, seriously. D:
I shall ask for more as well! PLEASE!
There are plenty of things I could say about this one-shot, especially how I like the realism in it, but I still find it pretty hilarious how a guy used a Master Ball on an Absol. xD
As for more, I think that it's fine enough as it is as a one-shot. Definitely makes the reader think. Very dramatic.
But of course, if you want to expand on the story, I won't complain. ^^
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wow, so moving and amazing! it was very dramatic, and i do wish to read more.
Glad I'm not the only evil person out there! xD Very nicely done.
Niet, you are such an amazing writer. You have so much detail and depth to your pieces. I could really see everything in this story and felt Silent Moon's determination and pain as my own. At that final click that confirmed her capture, I felt all my remaining hope and prayers drain out, leaving fear, depression, and helplessness that Silent Moon must have been feeling. I have to admit, evil writers like you might just be my favorite.
And to those who think it was stupid of the trainer to use a Master Ball on an Absol, I agree wholeheartedly. Who cares if she was a boss? Save it for Mewtwo or a shiny.
The rite part kind of reminds me of how in Erin Hunter books the animals pray to their ancestors after a sucessful catch. Anyway, awesome! I highly doubt I could write that much. And I really like stories that portray wild Pokémon as "wild animals WITH SPECIAL POWERS!" Or something. Maybe.
I ᴡᴀs ɢᴏɪɴɢ ᴛᴏ sᴀʏ sᴏᴍᴇᴛʜɪɴɢ ᴀʙᴏᴜᴛ
ʜᴇʀᴇ, ʙᴜᴛ ᴛʜᴀᴛ's ʙᴇᴇɴ ᴅᴏɴᴇ ᴛᴏ ᴅᴇᴀᴛʜ.
I read this story a few days ago and found myself still thinking about it—it really stuck with me. It’s a unique read to be sure. After all, I’m sure a lot of us Pokemon players don’t usually tend to think about whether or not the Pokemon we’re trying to capture has a family that it loves dearly.
The pacing of the action started off steady, then seemed to pick up during the battle scenes, reflecting well on the alarming situation. The irony of the defeated Ampharos, while subtle, certainly wasn’t lost on me. I also like how the mechanics of the Pokeball was explained. The fact that it works by dominating the will of the Pokemon adds to the theme of “Trainers are ignorant,” so it was a good choice to add that in there. The opening sentence might seem cliché, but in another sense, its familiarity was perfect for setting up a false feeling of security. I certainly wasn’t expecting such a depressing story! Finally, I love how it ends with just that one word—“Click.” Even ending with a period instead of an exclamation point makes it feel very final.
Now if you don’t mind humoring this lil fox, I just have three questions!
1. I’m curious, does Silent Moon truly respect the fallen Ampharos? It might just be me, but the way the rite was described (“fulfilled my most primal desires, and it felt good”, “strict rules to be followed, lest you invoke the wrath of Arceus”, “Now came the irritating part”) made it seem as if it was just another ritual to be performed—important, but not particularly important to Moon. I understood that the Ampharos was foraging for its own children, but did Moon? If she did, did she care?
2. This isn’t quite as important, but the Espeon didn’t seem as if it liked its trainer much, so going on that, how did the Trainer have an Espeon if Eevee can only be evolved into that through maximum happiness? Did he get it in a trade, perhaps?
3. More importantly, I know Pokemon can’t be released on their own, much less from a Master Ball, but suppose the Trainer called it out…Would Moon be able to stun him long enough for her to run away? It seems like she might be desperate enough to try it, perhaps?
if not, I like to think that a friendly pokemon came along to take care of the kids
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I... I'm crying... Why...? Why is this so unbearably sad?!?!?! I'm going to go either read a very happy story, or curl up in a ball and sob.
I will never catch another pokemon ever again. I just can't. I can't.
I need to release every single pokemon except my starter now. Why. Why do I need to. My Arcanine wasn't even caught in the wild. It evolved from a level 1 Growlithe.
Is my avatar bigger now? I'm not sure.
I love it, but it's so sad D:
Great story though. You're really good at this :o