HOW IS THAT LIKE FROZEN?!

@Brygames - To me, you sound like you didn't enjoy it but that doesn't mean you can double post in my story. I know the character isn't developed but if you don't have anything nice to post, I would rather you PM me straight and complain to me there. As this story is a ONE-SHOT! There wasn't going to be much development with how much was written. An another note, your criticism is important and will be taking into account if I ever write another Pokémon one-shot (Which I probably won't do much on seeing as I have other stories on different websites which need completing.) then I'll make sure to make it a longer one-shot and dig deeper into the character development. People are free to have their own opinions and if they say something it doesn't mean you can shoot them down for having it. Much like you've got your own opinion other people have their opinion. Think before you type, because text can be ambiguous to others when they read it. While you're not trying to be rude, some people can take offence to that. I wish you a good day/night and I'll be off. Bye.

I think it's really good for a One-shot. In some stories, such as this one, it's not about development, it's about the tone and mood of the story, as well as the events. I've read this story at least ten times, and it never fails to make my heart ache. It's a sweet story. It's true there isn't much character development, there could be just a tiny bit more, but in such a story like this, I hardly think that's the main thing to focus on. It's a very good story, Yukiko Shi. I hope that you continue writing in the future!

Wow... Too short to really comprehend, as you don't really, well, KNOW the character who dies. Like if this happened to, I don't know, Glory (Wings of Fire) or Hermione (Dangerverse fanfic) I'd be crying oceans right now. But that's because I know them and love them. (especially Glory.) I guess if you plan to make a sad story like this you'll have to go into more detail.

Excuse me, the title simply stated it was a one-shot. There is not going to be charater development bc it's a short story. I don't wnna be mean, just plz understand this.

I didn't cry, but this is very well written! I think there's something wrong with my emotions, I felt like crying but I didn't!

I would kill team flare if they did that to someone i loved. Escpecialy if i was the pumpkaboo.

...ngl, i cried a bit.

Ohh my god this is so touching I'm crying I'm crying- *breaths in* okay whew I'm not crying anymore :'> This was really well made and really emotional auugh I'l be over in that corner trying not to reread it and cry again x'D (note: it wasn't wailing just a few tears)